This week, I learned that it is good to have one paragraph focus on one topic so the reader is not too overwhelmed with all of the information. For example, one paragraph could talk about the reasons why something happened and another paragraph could talk about how I felt when that happened instead of having it all in one big paragraph. In addition, I learned that I need to use footnote citation for the Wikipedia article. This means that I need a superscript number enclosed in brackets as my citation and that my works cited should be numbered so my readers can easily find the sources being used. If one paragraph is using a source, I would just put the footnote citation at the end of the paragraph rather than at the end of every sentence and quote that was included in that paragraph. By doing so, the paragraph will look more organized and professional.
Personally, I like revision because it gives me the chance to improve my writing and enhance it so my words on paper can come as close as possible to matching the words in my head. From prior experience, I learned that during the revision process, it is imperative to get advice from other people in order to have outside perspectives. Thus, we should not take the suggestions and comments of others personally, and to hear out what they have to say. Nevertheless, the comments are suggestions, so we do not have to implement every revision that they give us – only the ones that we feel will advance the paper in the direction that we want it to go. From Donald Murray’s essay, “The Maker’s Eye,” I learned that when revising, it is a good idea to read the paper to yourself. This way, you can ask yourself if something sounds off as it comes off your tongue. Sometimes, when we are writing something, it might sound fine in our heads; but when we say it out loud, there is some kind of error in how it sounds. From Brock Dethier’s essay, “Revising Attitudes,” I learned that it is good to pat yourself on the back while revising and although it is good to be nitpicky, to not be too harsh on yourself.
Based on the feedback that I received for my living picture narrative, I will need to go through my essay again and make sure that all of my ideas flow properly. There may be some places where the picture does not match the ideas of the paragraph it is paired with or a certain paragraph may have too many points. Thus, I would have to split up the paragraph in order to create a main focus for each rather than having a single paragraph where my ideas are all over the place. With the feedback that I was given by others for my living picture narrative, I will need to have a descriptive revision plan where I will go through and summarize my paragraphs. This way, I can discern if one has too many points if it is too hard to create a short summary for the paragraph. I can also make sure the main points flow and connect by putting the summaries together.